Second thoughts on first thoughts

I have made some changes to First thoughts as you will see below.

I wasn’t happy with the word smog which felt anachronistic and I wanted something that showed what was happening. I also changed black stone buildings to make it more obvious I meant they were dirty rather than made of black stone. I also removed the word my in fade with my memory to make it less personal. Finally I added another couple of lines.

I grew up in a Victorian city
a place of monochrome memories

a place of huge machines and horse drawn carts
a place of smoke grimed skies

a place of long straight streets
a place of soot black stone buildings

a place of frayed little arcades
a place of odd old markets

a place thad modernism killed
a place thats vanished

a place that will fade with memory
leaving only the modern city

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