I have made some changes to First thoughts as you will see below.
I wasn’t happy with the word smog which felt anachronistic and I wanted something that showed what was happening. I also changed black stone buildings to make it more obvious I meant they were dirty rather than made of black stone. I also removed the word my in fade with my memory to make it less personal. Finally I added another couple of lines.
I grew up in a Victorian city
a place of monochrome memories
a place of huge machines and horse drawn carts
a place of smoke grimed skies
a place of long straight streets
a place of soot black stone buildings
a place of frayed little arcades
a place of odd old markets
a place thad modernism killed
a place thats vanished
a place that will fade with memory
leaving only the modern city