The development of a poem part 2

The last version was very much first thoughts and normally would not be seen but this series of posts is to show how things develop while writing. This version has a lot of changes which I hope remove some of the clumsy parts of the last version. Next should be trying to get everything into a better overall shape.


In the shops the bags of veg for soup appear
in the streets the light summer clothes disappear
winter coats, cardigans and sweaters become the norm
socks and big warm boots replace dainty shoes
as the first chills of autumn appear

Windows closed and heating turned on
the smell of smoke from the newly lit fires
halloween costumes arrive in shops
the first signs of Christmas appear
as we prepare to celebrate the change of season

Trees present their multi coloured glory as their year is ending
their leaves drop to the ground draping in a rustling blanket
Summer birds and butterflies have flown who knows where
Vs of gees fly over sounding mournful as they pass
Nature celebrates summers passing and warning of winter to come

The first frosts coating the land in a gleaming white powder
it touches the last of the flowers making them shrivel away
the mists start to appear filling the valleys with a white sea
up above clouds gather together forming a solid white sky
as the season slowly slides into winter

The nights grow longer colder and darker driving everyone indoors
the orange glow from the windows giving the promise of warmth inside
the pleasure to wrap up on the cold sunny days to go a walk
the diamond clear blue skies are a joy to behold lifting the spirits up
the cold has compensations in the beauties it creates


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